Okay - I absolutely love your store, but I hate to find typos on a website or in a magazine, newspaper, etc. Below are four you have on the first page: 1. You can furnish your home with pieces OF the showroom floor or you can.... It should say - off the showroom floor or from the showroom floor 2. Or IS you would rather, make an appointment with one of our.... It should say - Or IF you would rather, .... 3. Waiting for your visit Jim Smith, friendly fun-loving owner... Should say - Waiting for your visit IS Jim Smith, OUR friendly, fun-loving owner. 4. Incomplete sentence: A generous dollop of unmistakable QUALITY, ... There should be a comma after the word COMFORT and then continue the statment to the end.
Please don't be offended - just want to help you make your new blog match the quality of your store. Monica Wood
Okay - I absolutely love your store, but I hate to find typos on a website or in a magazine, newspaper, etc.
ReplyDeleteBelow are four you have on the first page:
1. You can furnish your home with pieces OF the showroom floor or you can....
It should say - off the showroom floor or from the showroom floor
2. Or IS you would rather, make an appointment with one of our....
It should say - Or IF you would rather, ....
3. Waiting for your visit Jim Smith, friendly fun-loving owner...
Should say - Waiting for your visit IS Jim Smith, OUR friendly, fun-loving owner.
4. Incomplete sentence: A generous dollop of unmistakable QUALITY, ...
There should be a comma after the word COMFORT and then continue the statment to the end.
Please don't be offended - just want to help you make your new blog match the quality of your store.
Monica Wood